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Yuuya Sakazaki ([personal profile] espigeonage) wrote in [community profile] savetheearth2013-06-10 11:55 am

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[Julien accidentally left a little lined notebook open in the clinic, with most of his number on the inside cover, missing only the last digit. It's not full of poems about Strider, but uh... there are a bunch that look like they apply to him. Also he copied down the poem from the letter and wrote "Outsiders? Robert Frost? Obviously a Smash Mouth fan" in the margins. Also, "No tattoos" was written under that and circled.]

[It does not appear that he actually meant for this to be read as a whole. There are grocery lists and little maps and doodles of wings, his niece, interlocking horseshoes, and Colette; there's a smudged sketch of The King with the caption "King. Hell? lost souls?". The poems are messy, they have messier drafts everywhere, he's got a heavily scribbled out page that appears to be about college debt...]


[Well they apply to other things and people too, he doesn't like to write really direct stuff. There are some drafts of this, with margins involving rhymes and a dislike thereof. The final version, while it's written fairly neatly, has one big X through the text, leaving it still legible:]

To the Sea


I am a rill besides a great river

His waters run deep and slow and silver

In a mile I am born and sink back into earth

Twenty times that wouldn't diminish his girth

I dance and froth over each little stone

The rocks of his bed no man knows

I will never reach the sea on my own

He has been there - look at his course, it shows

If I divert my course and join with the river

Will I be swallowed?

If I make his surface shiver

Joined or not, will I be here tomorrow?

[A couple lines beneath that: "creepy."]

[This one seems to have been dashed off quickly with no other drafts:]


I Hate Coming Up With Titles


if cold hands hide a warm heart

and all Hallmark's writings suggest this is true

who am I to argue my elders?

so then it is agreed

the seeming is not the substance

gold is covered by dross

sizzle is not steak (no matter what the menu says)

one can be good who does not look it

or believe it.


[yeah there are more but I'm kind of lazy, so just one other.]

[Looks like this one is his favorite! There's a version neatly copied in pen and torn out, but left in the little notebook like a bookmark. Earlier drafts are less abstracted and have lines like "It's not what you wanted / but it looks good to me" and sometimes glasses in the margins:]


A Barren Tree


a tree on the plain braces the sky

grasses were a sea around it, now

the sea is concrete and metal and cars fleeting past

where it was adorned by peregrinators now rest pigeons, and sparrows

and shoes


and at the tail of fall a traveler comes to watch dried leaves settle

and says, the winter will be hard

this tree is old

maybe this is the last time


who am I to argue my elders? Well

I am light and gold-eyed still and I see

winter will be hard

this tree is old and looks it

but it's a good tree

maybe this is not the last time


there is life in winter's little death

the leaves have died but the bore lives yet

and will go on for this winter, and winters yet to come.

it will rest and be reborn time and time again

maybe it isn't what it was, but

it's still good.


and if I'm wrong, well

come traveler with me in the spring

we will watch birds build nests in dead branches.

angelskills: (« where dem girls at)

[personal profile] angelskills 2013-06-16 07:02 am (UTC)(link)
Hehe... I'm glad to hear that. I like talking with you too, Julien! I'm glad we met.

Huh, maybe. I feel bad for the bananas.

... Oh yes!! Is that your niece? She's adorable!
angelskills: (« bitches as far as the eye can see)

[personal profile] angelskills 2013-06-17 02:18 am (UTC)(link)
[ She'll let the other stuff dwindle down... they can talk about it in person, it's private, after all. ]

I think it's cute.